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[fahye]

guidelines for safety

my love you are the envelope of many-coloured money
near which my hand will never stray
as it lies rustling,
inside my bag as I stride fast and conscious of the wealth
beneath my palm. you are the yellow sign
at which I will never exchange it for the slow compression of space.

you are the cosy darkness of my fear,
waterwashed weak by the canvas between
but nanostrong and microdeep,
that I could lose you to a smarter tongue;
a closer touch;
a better pair of boots.
you are the pale grey fingers gloved and closed around your own left hand,
to the sight of which
I will never object.

you are oilslick down the sluggy wings of change,
the easy rainbow slide of lying abed past noon
and a life cut out from chiffon silk
with scissors so sharp they whisper fine
and twisted romances into the silver air.

you are the wide blue geodesic down which I will never fall;
my love you are the distance that has freed my heart.

Comments

[lilith-lessfair.livejournal.com]

Lovely, fahye!

I thought this bit was particularly nice, clever in terms of word choice but economical too.

fear,
waterwashed weak by the canvas between
but nanostrong and microdeep,
that I could lose you to a smarter tongue;
a closer touch;
a better pair of boots.

[fahye.livejournal.com]

Thank you; that was the section I was least confident of, so I'm glad it worked for you.

[lilith-lessfair.livejournal.com]

The word choices are different than the ones I am used to seeing in your writing, a little plainer but as precise as always. I think I liked the beat of it and the consonance of waterwashed weak.

[schiarire.livejournal.com]

SO FANTASTIC. LONGER COMMENT LATEr.

[fahye.livejournal.com]

\o/

[mercuriazs.livejournal.com]

oooh.

[apiphile.livejournal.com]

my love you are the distance that has freed my heart.

Perfect.

[fahye.livejournal.com]

:))) I'm glad to hear that. The rhythm of this one gave me a lot of trouble because it's deliberately inconsistent, but I think it ended up the way I wanted it to.

[bookshop.livejournal.com]

this is beautiful.

[fahye.livejournal.com]

:)) Thanks.